LLM出願書類対策:Harvard編 Part-2 Personal Statementの重要性

今回は2020-21 Application Sample(昨シーズンのもの)使って、Personal Statementで求められることを一緒に考えていきたいと思います。

The Personal Statement is an essential component of your application. It provides an opportunity for you to present ideas and demonstrate your writing ability to the Committee on Graduate Studies. Please limit your statement to no more than 1,500 words, anything exceeding this limit will be disregarded, Please note that footnotes do not count towards the overall word limit as long as they are limited to providing sources and citations.
Harvard Law Schoolに限ったことではありませんが、各スクールから指定される字数制限(Word Limit)は厳守してください。字数を指定し、その範囲内で自らの意見をまとめる力(ライティング力)も評価の対象となります。

The Personal Statement must be solely the product of your own efforts. We reserve the right to disqualify the application of a candidate who has submitted a Personal Statement written by, or with the help of, someone other than the candidate.

Personal Statementのドラフトを日本語で完成させ、翻訳会社に英訳を依頼する方法について質問を受けることがあります。”The product of your own efforts”の解釈として、自分でドラフトを作り上げる(第三者によるproof readingは除く)ようお願いします。第三者が英訳しますと、アドミッション側はアプリカントの英語力に関して評価のしようがありません。こうした行為は行わないようくれぐれもご注意ください。

Your personal statement should address both of the following questions specifically, with Part (A) constituting at least half of the total length.

(A) Briefly describe either an important issue in your field of interest or a current legal problem facing a particular country, region, or the world, and then propose a theoretical framework or a legal analysis or strategy to address this issue.

(B) Please tell us something about yourself- in particular, why you wish to pursue an LL.M degree at Harvard and how dosing so connects with what you have done in the past and what your plant to do in the future.

今回はPart (B)を取り上げます。

My wish to pursue an LL.M. Degree at Harvard Law School
i) Criminal Law and Policy
ii) International and Comparative Law
iii) Law and Business
iv) Law and Government
v) Law and History
vi) Law and Social Change
vii) Law, Science, and Technology


How studying at Harvard connects with what I have done in the past and what my plan to do in the future.
→My planとは、アプリカントが短期および長期目標を達成することで得られる、こうありたい/こうなりたい姿(ビジョン)に言及しています。このビジョンには自分の大切な価値観や考え方を反映されていることが重要なポイントです。その姿にたどり着くためのマイルストーンが目標になります。このビジョンを明確にすることで、そこへ辿り着くまでに具体的に数値化した目標やアクションプランを設定していきます。そのため、同校のApplication Form内では以下のような設問が出題されています。

Career plans: What are your career plans (both short-term and long-term goal) after your complete your graduate law studies?


Current occupation: _______
Year 1-3:短期目標        
Year 4-6:中期目標        
Year 7 and beyond: 長期目標   

Please elaborate on your plans. In which country (or countries) do you intend to pursue your career? (Please limit your response to no more than 1500 characters.)

Application を作成する上では、複数の書類でLL.M.取得後の目標について記述するといった重複する行為は回避しなければなりません (Personal Statementで短期目標等を言及する必要はありません)。

同校を卒業した学生がLegal Professionalとして、さらなる成長を遂げるための原動力として、ビジョンを描く力がを求めていることが読み取れます。法曹界におけるリーダーを育成する同校の教育方針がエッセイ課題に反映されています。

Eiki Satori

2021-2022 Oxford MBA出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 Oxford MBA出願締切日およびエッセイ課題が発表されました。オンラインアプリケーションは30 July 2021にアップされる予定です。

Application deadlines

Stage 1: Wednesday, 1 September 2021
Stage 2: Wednesday, 13 October 2021
Stage 3: Wednesday, 12 January 2022
Stage 4: Wednesday, 23 March 2022


Written work

Tell us something that is not covered in your application which you would like the Admissions Committee to know about you. (Maximum 250 words)
If you are applying under the Oxford 1+1 MBA scheme you also need to submit the following essay:

Explain why you see this as particularly beneficial for you and how it fits with your career and personal development aims. (Maximum 250 words)



Chizuko Okada

2021-2022 MIT Sloan (MBA)出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 MIT Sloan  (MBA)出願締切日およびエッセイ課題が発表されました

2021-2022 MIT Sloan(2-year program)
MBA Round 1 September 28, 2021
MBA Round 2  January 19, 2022
MBA Round 3 April 12, 2022

Applications must be submitted by 3:00 p.m. EST

Cover Letter

MIT Sloan seeks students whose personal characteristics demonstrate that they will make the most of the incredible opportunities at MIT, both academic and non-academic. We are on a quest to find those whose presence will enhance the experience of other students. We seek thoughtful leaders with exceptional intellectual abilities and the drive and determination to put their stamp on the world. We welcome people who are independent, authentic, and fearlessly creative — true doers. We want people who can redefine solutions to conventional problems, and strive to preempt unconventional dilemmas with cutting-edge ideas. We demand integrity and respect passion.

Taking the above into consideration, please submit a cover letter seeking a place in the MIT Sloan MBA Program. Your letter should conform to a standard business correspondence, include one or more examples that illustrate why you meet the desired criteria above, and be addressed to the Assistant Deans of Admissions, Rod Garcia and Dawna Levenson (300 words or fewer, excluding address and salutation).

Video Statement

Applicants are required to upload a 1 minute (60 seconds) video as part of their application. In your video, you should introduce yourself to your future classmates, tell us about your past experiences, and touch on why MIT Sloan is the best place for you to pursue your degree.

Videos should adhere to the following guidelines:

  • No more than 1 minute (60 second) in length
  • Single take (no editing)
  • You should be speaking directly to the camera
  • Do not include background music or subtitles

We recommend using applications such as QuickTime or iMovie to record yourself.  Upload the video file according to the detailed instructions within the application.

We support the following file formats: .avi, .flv, .m1v, .m2v, .m4v, .mkv, .mov, .mpeg, .mpg, .mp4, .webm, .wmv. Apple ProRes is not currently supported. If uploading a .mov, please use an alternate codec.

Should you experience difficulties uploading your file, please ensure that you’re using a modern web browser (Chrome, Firefox, or Safari) on the fastest wired internet connection available. An intermittent or slow internet connection can cause uploads to timeout.



Chizuko Okada

2021-2022 NYU Stern(MBA)出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 NYU Stern(MBA)の出願締切日およびエッセイ課題が発表されました。オンラインアプリケーションも更新されておりますので、NYUに興味がある方は、ぜひオンラインアプリケーションも含めて出願要綱を確認しましょう。


Full-time MBA

Deadline Initial Notification* By
1st Deadline September 15, 2021 December 1, 2021
2nd Deadline October 15, 2021 January 1, 2022
3rd Deadline January 15, 2022 April 1, 2022
4th Deadline March 15, 2022 June 1, 2022

 *You will receive one of three initial notifications: invitation to interview, waitlist offer, or denial of admission

Fashion & Luxury MBA

Deadline Initial Notification* By
1st Deadline September 15, 2021 December 1, 2021
2nd Deadline November 15, 2021 February 1, 2022
3rd Deadline January 15, 2022 March 1, 2022
4th Deadline** February 15, 2022 April 1, 2022

*You will receive one of three initial notifications: invitation to interview, waitlist offer, or denial of admission

**Only U.S. Citizens and Permanent Residents may apply by this deadline. Applicants who are non-U.S. citizens at the time of submitting their application must apply no later than the January 15 deadline.

Andre Koo Tech MBA

Deadline Initial Notification* By
1st Deadline September 15, 2021 December 1, 2021
2nd Deadline November 15, 2021 February 1, 2022
3rd Deadline January 15, 2022 March 1, 2022
4th Deadline** February 15, 2022 April 1, 2022

*You will receive one of three initial notifications: invitation to interview, waitlist offer, or denial of admission

**Only U.S. Citizens and Permanent Residents may apply by this deadline. Applicants who are non-U.S. citizens at the time of submitting their application must apply no later than the January 15 deadline.


Our Stern essay questions give you the opportunity to more fully present yourself to the Admissions Committee and to provide insight into your experiences, goals, and thought processes.

Your essays must be written entirely by you. An offer of admission will be rescinded if you did not write your essays.

Short Answer: Professional Aspirations
(150 word maximum, double-spaced, 12-point font)
What are your short-term career goals?

Essay 1: Change: _________ it
(350 word maximum, double-spaced, 12-point font)

In today’s global business environment, the only constant is change. Using NYU Stern’s brand call to action, we want to know how you view change. Change: _____ it. Fill in the blank with a word of your choice. Why does this word resonate with you? How will you embrace your own personal tagline while at Stern? Examples:
Change: Dare it.
Change: Dream it.
Change: Drive it.
Change: Empower it.
Change: Manifest it.
Change: [Any word of your choice.]

Essay 2: Personal Expression (a.k.a. “Pick Six”)
Describe yourself to the Admissions Committee and to your future classmates using six images and corresponding captions. Your uploaded PDF should contain all of the following elements:
A brief introduction or overview of your “Pick Six” (no more than 3 sentences).
Six images that help illustrate who you are.
A one-sentence caption for each of the six images that helps explain why they were selected and are significant to you.
Note: Your visuals may include photos, infographics, drawings, or any other images that best describe you. Your document must be uploaded as a single PDF. The essay cannot be sent in physical form or be linked to a website.

Essay 3: Additional Information (optional)
(250 word maximum, double-spaced, 12-point font)

Please provide any additional information that you would like to bring to the attention of the Admissions Committee. This may include current or past gaps in employment, further explanation of your undergraduate record or self-reported academic transcript(s), plans to retake the GMAT, GRE, Executive Assessment, IELTS or TOEFL, or any other relevant information.


Chizuko Okada

2021-2022 UC Berkeley Haas出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 UC Berkeley Haas出願締切日およびエッセイ課題が発表されました

2021-2022 Application Deadlines

Round 1
Deadline: September 23, 2021
Decision: December 16, 2021

Round 2
Deadline: January 6, 2022
Decision: March 24, 2022

Round 3
Deadline: April 7, 2022
Decision: May 12, 2022


Essay topics

#1: What makes you feel alive when you are doing it, and why? (300 words maximum)

#2: The definition of successful leadership has evolved over the last decade and will continue to change. What do you need to develop to become a successful leader? (300 words max)

Optional Information #1

We invite you to help us better understand the context of your opportunities and achievements:

1. What is the highest level of education completed by your parent(s) or guardian(s)?

Did not complete high school
High school diploma or equivalency (GED) Associate’s degree (junior college) or vocational degree/license
Bachelor’s degree (BA, BS)
Master’s degree (MA, MS)
Doctorate or professional degree (MD, JD, DDS)
2. What is the most recent occupation of your parent(s) or guardian(s)?

Skilled worker
3. If you were raised in one of the following household types, please indicate:

Raised by a single parent
Raised by an extended family member (grandparent, aunt/uncle, niece/nephew, cousin)
Raised in a multi-generational home
Raised in foster care
4. What was the primary language spoken in your childhood home?

5. If you have you ever been responsible for providing significant and continuing financial or supervisory support for someone else, please indicate:

Extended family member (grandparent, aunt/uncle, niece/nephew, cousin)
6. Please elaborate on any of your above responses. Alternatively, you may use this opportunity to expand on other hardships or unusual life circumstances that may help us understand the context of your opportunities, achievements, and impact. (300 words maximum)

Optional Information #2

This section should only be used to convey relevant information not addressed elsewhere in your application. This may include explanation of employment gaps, academic aberrations, supplemental coursework, etc. You are encouraged to use bullet points where appropriate.


Chizuko Okada

2021-2022 Stanford GSB 出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 Stanford GSB (MBA )の出願締切日およびエッセイ課題が発表されました。エッセイ課題は昨年と同様になります。

2021–22 Deadlines
Submit your application by We will notify you on
09 Sep 2021 09 Dec 2021
05 Jan 2022 31 Mar 2022


Essay A: What matters most to you, and why?

For this essay, we would like you to reflect deeply and write from the heart. Once you’ve identified what matters most to you, help us understand why. You might consider, for example, what makes this so important to you? What people, insights, or experiences have shaped your perspectives?

Essay B: Why Stanford?

Describe your aspirations and how your Stanford GSB experience will help you realize them. If you are applying to both the MBA and MSx programs, use Essay B to address your interest in both programs.


Both essays combined may not exceed 1,050 words. We recommend up to 650 words for Essay A and up to 400 words for Essay B. We often find effective essays that are written in fewer words.

Short Answers (Optional)
Optional Question A

In the Essays section of the application, we ask you to tell us about who you are and how you think Stanford will help you achieve your aspirations. We are also interested in learning about the things you have done that are most meaningful to you. If you would like to go beyond your resume to discuss some of your contributions more fully, you are welcome to share up to three examples (up to 1,200 characters, or approximately 200 words, for each example).

Question: Think about times you’ve created a positive impact, whether in professional, extracurricular, academic, or other settings. What was your impact? What made it significant to you or to others?

Optional Question B

We know that each person is more than a list of facts or pre-defined categories. We are interested in how your background may have influenced your life experiences. In answering this question, consider how your background, such as your work, education, skills, interests, culture, socioeconomic status, sexual orientation, gender identity, race, ethnicity, where/how you grew up, and/or other factors had an impact on your recent actions and choices (up to 1,200 characters, or approximately 200 words).

Question: Tell us about a time within the last three years when your background influenced your participation in a situation, interaction, or project.


Chizuko Okada

AGOS 奨学金対策ワークショップ報告と奨学金対策のアドバイス



Study Objectives/研究計画書の重要性

2) 留学先大学院での具体的な研究/学習プランの策定
3) 上記研究/学習計画実施後における国内学術/産業界への影響の設定
4) 研究/学習計画実現のために国内大学院ではなく、海外大学院への進学が必須である理由の説明

そして、上述の研究/学習目標達成のために、海外大学院で活躍できるだけの「学力」や、学習/研究に関連した職務実績などを十分に有していることを示すエビデンスの証明が重要です(Resume/CV/推薦状の活用が効果的)。さらには、そのエビデンス(これまでに自身がそれらの能力をどのように築いてきたか)を「Personal statement」の中で、具体的なエピソードを使用して伝えていきます。


奨学金獲得は、留学資金の負担の軽減だけではなく、奨学金団体を通じた留学中/帰国後のネット ワークの拡大、奨学生に選抜されたという実績が大学院入学審査へのアピールにつながるなど、様々なメリットを享受できます。しかし、競争倍率が高いもの多く、入念な準備が必要です。

MBA・LLM・大学院 奨学⾦応募戦略パッケージで万全な対策を

Eiki Satori

2021-2022 Cambridge MBA 出願締切日発表

2021-2022 Cambridge MBA 出願締切日が発表されました。

Round Application deadline Interview dates
1 13 September 2021 15-29 October 2021
2 18 October 2021 26 November-10 December 2021
3 10 January 2022 18 February-11 March 2022
4 7 March 2022 15-29 April 2022
5 25 April 2022 3-17 June 2022


Chizuko Okada

2021-2022 Columbia MBA 出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 Columbia MBA 出願締切日およびエッセイ課題が発表されました

August 2022 Entry Application Deadlines

Early Decision October 6, 2021
Merit Fellowship January 5, 2022
Regular Decision April 8, 2022

January 2022 Entry Application Deadline

Regular Decision October 6, 2021



Applicants must complete one short answer question and three essays.

Short Answer Question: What is your immediate post-MBA professional goal? (50 characters maximum)

Examples of possible responses:

  • “Work in business development for a media company.”
  • “Join a strategy consulting firm.”
  • “Launch a data-management start-up.”

Essay 1

Through your resume and recommendations, we have a clear sense of your professional path to date. What are your career goals over the next three to five years and what, in your imagination, would be your long-term dream job? (500 words)

Essay 2 and 3: Please respond to two (2) of the three (3) essay questions listed below:

  • The Phillips Pathway for Inclusive Leadership (PPIL) is a new co-curricular program designed to ensure that every CBS student develops the skills to become an ethical and inclusive leader. Through PPIL, students attend programming focused on give essential diversity, equity, and inclusion skills: Creating an Inclusive Environment, Mitigating Bias, Communicating Across Identities, Addressing Systemic Inequality, and Managing Difficult Conversations. Tell us about a time you were challenged around one of these five skills.  Describe the situation, the actions you took, and the outcome. (250 words)
  • Why do you feel Columbia Business School is a good fit for you? (250 words)
  • Tell us about your favorite book, movie, or song and why it resonates with you? (250 words)

Optional Essay

Is there any further information that you wish to provide the Admissions Committee? If so, use this space to provide an explanation of any areas of concern in your academic record or your personal history. This does not need to be a formal essay. You may submit bullet points. (Maximum 500 Words)


Chizuko Okada

2021-2022 UCLA MBA 出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表

2021-2022 UCLA MBA 出願締切日およびエッセイ課題発表が発表されました

All applicants must apply to the MBA program online. Applications will be accepted for Fall 2022 starting August 1, 2021.

Deadlines & Decisions
Application Deadline Decision release date
Roud 1 2021/10/5 2021/12/14
Roud 2 2022/1/4 2022/3/22
Roud 3 2022/4/12 2022/5/17

We look forward to learning about your perspectives and plans via your essay responses. Essays complement the answers you provide throughout the application to show us your whole profile. The best applications are introspective, genuine and succinct in directly answering our questions and showing clear plans for the future.

A) Essay: For the 2021-2022 application year, we have one essay question that is required for first-time applicants and optional for re-applicants:

How have recent events influenced the impact you would like to make in your community, career, or both? (250 words maximum)

We welcome reflection on any events that influenced you in your personal or professional lives, or in society in general, and look forward to learning about specific ways you want to leave your mark.

B) Optional Essay: No preference is given in the evaluation process to those who choose to respond to this optional essay, so please use your best judgment:

Are there any extenuating circumstances in your profile about which the Admissions committee should be aware? (250 words maximum)


Reapplicants are those who applied to the MBA program within the last two application years, so those who applied three or more years ago are considered new applicants.

Reapplicants may answer one or both of the essay questions above as options, and they must provide additional updates within text boxes given in the application for any new test scores, career developments, or other changes since their last application.


Chizuko Okada